Published Literacy Writing

My writing goals:
1. Use a variety of sentence structures, beginnings and lengths to give effect.
2. Write in structured, well developed paragraphs that flow well from one to the next within the text.

Original:
I let the dog loose off the lead. He runs eagerly away from me and soon disappears into the forest. I let him run, I let him disappear because I know he is going to come back. I grip the tree, letting my body lean against it. A stick returns minutes later with an owner of it panting and jumping around waiting for me to throw it. I don’t throw it, I don’t want to. The dog tries to climb onto my jacket and I laugh. Of course only Benji does that, he’s the only dog I know who will sit on my shoulder and lick my face. His soft coat against my skin is so warm. I take him home and wrap him in a warm blanket. He looks happy. I leave him for some time. I come back an hour later and he is looking from me to his red lead and collar on the shelf. I give in and take him back to the forest. I open my eyes and think to my self. Was this really just a dream? I guess it was because I am in my room and Benji is sitting on his dog bed.

Published:
I unclip the leash and he races away. He is eager to get away from me and soon disappears into the forest. I let him run, I let him disappear because I know he is going to come back.

The tree catches my body against it. Minutes later, a stick is dropped at my foot with an owner of it panting and jumping around waiting for me to throw it. I don’t throw it, I don’t want to. The dog tries to climb onto my jacket and I shriek.

Of course only Benji does that, he’s the only dog I know who will sit on my shoulder and lick my face. His soft coat against my skin is so warm, just like a thermal. I return him home and wrap him in a toasty blanket. He looks happy.

I leave him for some time. I come back an hour later and he is looking from me to his red lead and collar on the shelf. I let him win and take him back to the forest. I open my weary eyes and think to my self. Was this really just a dream? I guess it was. I find myself back in my room and Benji is sitting on his dog bed.